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    dots Submission Name: riverdots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 18
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsriverdots
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    The river is pure

    it devours the earth

    slowly

    and lovingly disgorges it

    elsewhere




    Submitted on 2014-09-02 11:24:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Simple, literal, yet all the more metaphorical. The expression in this description on nature makes me feel a hint of something else equally as real. We are all pieces that may be traced back to another- as a child looks like a stone; watching, sitting, influenced by its surroundings rather than itself.

    This piece, no matter how short, got me thinking. I appreciate that. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2014-09-28 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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