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    dots Submission Name: Woodpecker's Kissdots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       The other day I heard my stepfather say "harder than a woodpecker's lips", and that inspired this poem.


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    dotsWoodpecker's Kissdots
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    Woodpecker, her beak is firm
    and unyielding,
    a tool to carve out the trees.

    And yet her kisses are the most tender
    of all the winged ones,
    even gentler than the kisses of doves.

    When my mouth hungers for another mouth,
    and my tongue is eager to caress another tongue,
    it is she I will call;
    it is she who will burrow
    into my heart.




    Submitted on 2014-09-02 11:32:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The contrast is strong between the first two verses. The harshness of the beak, versus the tenderness of the kiss. In the third verse it joins the two with the verbs "caress" and "burrow" forming a whole image. I thoroughly enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2014-12-12 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem. You mined something true out of this image or inspiration you had, very organically it seems. Poems like this one are very direct, because they know the depth that lies behind them. Also it benefits from something new, taken from a passing phrase and made universal. I like it.
    | Posted on 2014-09-09 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]


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