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    dots Submission Name: ™ © The Emotional Storms Of a Scorpio dots
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    Author: kyserin
    ASL Info:    30's/Female/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 44/25/52
    Words: 495
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Nature
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    dots™ © The Emotional Storms Of a Scorpio dots
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    Scorpios are known for tidal wave emtions we are mostly fond of or are friends with destructional distrust & anger , mostly i find it to be anger that fuels fires , though anger is less of a fire starter then our friend distrust , our distrust eats at us breaks us down . We know those signs all to well in ourselves , your intuition breaks you , it makes you spiral & crack.

    What is even greater is to awaken youself from your own storm , your demise that storm youve become numb to , Then when you wake you relize you're stronger then you have noticed , Our emotions can ither be binding or be broken its all about the state of ours mind that are conflicting with our thoughts instead of hearing your inner self speak to you, your
    hearing the thoughts in your head instead.

    We can ither feel our emotions full force or put up walls up or block out our humanity , thus we become emotionless persona...cold....bitter , cruel , bitchy , irrational, argumentative & hateful ,.

    This is how we stop from getting hurt....broken...used...betrayed ,
    so we shut down our humanity making us cold , bitter and hated & blunt .

    What i do know from experience , is that it takes a certain thing or some-one to break that barrier or humanity block, that some-one or something you finally decide to let in something you treasure or hold close to your heart & soul , so strong it is enough to break your hold on your emotions breaking your walls your controlled storms ,Thus letting you feel a new experience with each blow of passion as things change and you are no longer the same as you once was.

    Thus.....

    Leaving your open emotions vulnerable , your feelings on the edge of your sleve knowing youve become unglued and you become the uncontrollable monster you hate in yourself that weekness you see anther with * love , feelings *, only because you love the stability in your controlled emotions that familiar wall you miss , you would rather love what you hold dear to you more then love your barrier.

    Leaving....your shell your shield and safety behind.
    Giving your faith your being to anther giving then power.

    In a form The shell in a since keeps us safe it does , keep us safe .
    But however its having our barriers broken down that feels good to us new belief once again ....even though were leery , The Catch is only if we have trust in what broke it " our wall , " when and if " we fall outa trust our walls will go right back up...sadly thus waiting to be broken again...by some-one or something that burns our desire and holds our demons at bay.




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      I couldn't check up on what exactly you were expecting for a review, so I'm just gonna take the liberty to give you a heads up on the grammar issue you're having.

    |destructional| isn't a word. I think you were trying to say |destructive|
    "eats at us AND breaks us down" - just one tip out of many that I noted you had forgotten to join.
    "all TOO well in ourselves" - TO is in direction, TOO is in value(too much, too well, etc.)/equality(me, too, etc.)
    I'm not sure as to what you meant with "your intuition breaks you", knowing full well that you're only using a term of expression, yet still...can't quite get that.
    Ah, you forgot the A in Realize. If you ever have curiosities or doubts when it comes to spelling, don't hesitate to Google, message a friend, or even autocorrect!
    "Our emotions can ITHER be..." Again, the spelling is a bit of a problem. You repetitively spell Either as Ither.

    "...break that barrier or humanity block,"
    The usage of Humanity in this context is incorrect. Maybe try something like "break that barrier; a blockage created by the human mind"? Just an idea.

    I'd get through it all, but, frankly, I wouldn't wanna over-do my over-view, haha. Help yourself out because some of this has major potential, really.
    You, as a writer, have major potential, actually.

    -Peace, Chris
    | Posted on 2014-10-01 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this. My boyfriend is a Scorpio and this sounds liked you crawled inside his head and emptied it of thoughts. He has been struggling for years with his inner rage and demons. He puts up emotional walls to keep his " beast" caged. Anytime we get close to tearing his own walls down its very hard for him bc when you have those barriers up all your life and try to break them so many emotions come flooding out. I can understand him so much better after reading this. Anger ( for him) is his weakness so he figures what better way to deal with it than to keep it all locked inside.
    I can appreciate the struggle better than before and will definitely be sharing this him. Maybe it will help him by seeing he is not alone.
    Great read, thank you for this.
    | Posted on 2014-09-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]


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