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    dots Submission Name: whiskey nightdots
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    Author: slntfirflm
    ASL Info:    26/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 301/331/93
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       A place I was a couple momths ago after my sister's passing. My head it clearer now, but definitely a powerful read in my opinion.


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    dotswhiskey nightdots
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    Feel the need to release
    Want to scream
    Break everything that surrounds me
    Constantly
    Though I grit my teeth and bare
    With a smile on my face
    Its not easy to take the world in with grace
    Stumble and fall
    Falling ever so deep
    In such a despair
    No one can save me
    What is becoming of me
    Whiskey night
    Everynight
    To fight
    To survive
    When I'm alone
    without worry of what others may say
    Oh what is becoming of me
    Since you left
    Had my life in control
    Now it's nothing but bumpy roads
    What's funny to me
    Is I suffer more than what they may see
    Though majority of the time
    All one sees is me flying to the sky
    How often do I show pain in my eyes
    Some days I can barely get out of bed
    Though through daylight hours
    I stand tall and true
    However, once I clock out things always change
    Most days I drink alone
    Some days I am sane
    Allowing myself to embrace in the night
    Making memories with those I adore
    It's times like this that I live for
    So I will not scream
    Or break
    Just ever so slowly
    Keep sipping on my whiskey
    Until the next morning
    When I can rise with a smile
    Like there is nothing to fear
    Until nightfall bestows upon me
    When all my fears start to settle in
    Oh look, it's time to drink again.




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      I too only drink whiskey for medicinal purposes, and perhaps some occasional religious ones. It is truly great stuff. Sad to hear about your sister, you must have been close so you can continue to treasure that even as you miss her.

    If both the mystics and scientists can say that time is only an illusion then at such time as we become fully conscious of that our past, present and future come together and we are reunited with all of our great family... I'll drink to that.

    Fears are not an excuse to drink, but celebrations are... Meanwhile, there's bound to be some duties that require us to be sober (if not entirely sane) most of the time. My next slug of Bourbon is hereby dedicated to you (I do not sip, for some reason it doesn't feel right). Cheers!
    | Posted on 2014-09-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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