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    dots Submission Name: LÄPPLEdots
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    Author: Sethesin
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 226/173/142
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Three grey witches crossed an open field to me
    A much littler me in a chipboard hut beneath the trees
    One of them told me to say something rude, I think
    Then they all laughed
    and twisted altogether vapourish
    With their knowing trees bowing knowingly

    I cursed them all to rust
    To the yellowing rot of factories
    To the very husk
    and with the silk-rushing clouds as my witness
    Their strange laughter had then soft-soothed
    Down into a deeper, knowing hush




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      I would critique the line that says 'littler me' if I hadn't felt the vibes off this poem so thoroughly, but I did...so, it's perfect, actually. I wonder if you have any idea just how happy this poem makes me feel. It's eerie, like a nightmare on Halloween night, but it feels something like Hocus Pocus. I love it, so much. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2014-09-25 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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