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    dots Submission Name: Balin: First to Go. Last to Leave.dots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.41 - 5/110/127
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 826
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1082



    Description:
       This is i guess my tribute to my cousin that recently passed away..
    There weren't honestly enough words to explain his life and his meaning to me personally so i plan to write a couple more to truly show how much he meant to just me alone.


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    dotsBalin: First to Go. Last to Leave.dots
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    Their are five of us.
    Neil.
    Christian.
    Colton.
    Zeth.
    And Balin.

    Neil,
    The eldest.
    The trouble-maker.
    The hugs guy.
    The leader.

    Christian,
    The insane.
    The hyper.
    The nerd.
    The talker.

    Colton,
    The athlete.
    The intelligent.
    The voice of reason.
    The protector.

    Zeth,
    The gamer.
    The sarcastic.
    The stubborn.
    The caregiver.

    Balin,
    The youngest.
    The jokester.
    The sleeper.
    The eater.
    The ladies man.
    The Star Wars guy.
    The leader.
    The talker.
    The protector.
    The caregiver.
    The friend.
    The family.
    The hero.
    The legend.
    The great one.
    The first to go.
    The last to be forgotten.

    My friend...
    My family...
    My cousin...
    My brother...
    Our everything.
    Balin Ethan Daniel Robbins.






    Submitted on 2014-09-12 03:16:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it emotional and okay it portrays he really means a lot to u but it was a little short maybe if u wrote more it it would be more emotional. I loved it though
    | Posted on 2014-09-18 00:00:00 | by vinestar | [ Reply to This ]
      What a Crew, J. Jill
    | Posted on 2014-09-12 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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