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    dots Submission Name: The end is another beginningdots

    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 337/331/94
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe end is another beginningdots

    So its reached its breaking point.
    The end was seen,
    yet abrupt.

    It's stopping point was jolted.
    leaving the pain of its happening
    well after the "crash" was over.

    I could see the accident up the road,
    yet I stayed my course
    and didn't heed the warnings...
    I was a fool...

    Now I'm faced with its end,
    or a beginning.
    I know it should be seen in a different light,
    but I cannot look that far forward yet.
    I'm still covering my face,
    seeing the replay,
    hearing the crash.

    I'm still broken...
    I was in the beginning,
    as I am now...

    Its time to fix me.

    And this is a job Ive now hesitated for awhile.
    its my task to complete,
    so I can be the person I should be.
    The person I should of waited for in my "old beginning".

    I wont say time was wasted.
    life was good for its season,
    now the book is closed,
    and the pages have been read.

    This lesson wont be forgotten.
    I will play its scenes in my mind
    for the rest of my life,
    and be better because of it.


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      "Now I'm faced with its end,
    or a beginning.
    I know it should be seen in a different light
    but I cannot look that far forward yet.
    I'm still covering my face,
    seeing the replay,
    hearing the crash."

    The events are too fresh
    the agony raw
    like a sharp stab of light
    to a tired eye
    they could have been angels
    these long ago whispers
    that faded beneath us
    as we passed them by...
    | Posted on 2014-09-24 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me think of bad decisions that I've made in my life. I believe its important to get the emotions out when you write, like it helps to heal yourself. I feel yours in this along with my own. It made me feel that I can carry on and grow from my mistakes, that this is also me and everyone. I love it when i feel pain from others but its also my own (sorry if that doesn't make sense) I enjoyed reading this.
    My favorite line is "I will play the scenes in the mind for rest of my life. And be better because of it."

    Growing and learning is always a step forward. I look forward to reading more.
    | Posted on 2014-09-15 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]

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