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Submission Name: falling star dots

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Author:	vinestar
Elite Ratio:	2.37 - 3/5/2
Words:	67

Class/Type:	Poetry/Nature
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falling star dots

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I look up and see the star falling from it abode
falling fast and free
from the dark clear sky

quickly I try to make a wish
a wish deep in my heart needed to be wished before it would be fulfilled

I open my eyes to see nothing
but the path left in the sky by my wishing star

Submitted on 2014-09-17 16:51:10 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I look up and see the star falling from the abode …(hahaha)?

The house-home, the dwelling, the heaven, the love, the abode defines these stars well.

To thee I see not the hahaha.
| Posted on 2014-09-23 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  (the) works too.
| Posted on 2014-09-21 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  falling from (its) abode

You'll find your anything right there on top when you open your nothing and though it might not amount to an everything we should be able to make due.

Bruce
| Posted on 2014-09-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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