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    dots Submission Name: A Forlorn Heartdots
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    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsA Forlorn Heartdots
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    The walls of my heart
    are not red any more.
    The rain swept away your foot prints.
    The sun dried up your fragrance.
    I lose my memory of your love;
    Every day the moss grows thicker on the bricks.




    Submitted on 2014-09-20 14:58:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The walls of my heart
    are not red anymore

    The rain swept your foot prints away
    The sun dried up the last wisp of your fragrance

    I've lost my memory of your love
    Every day the moss grows thick on the bricks


    Just my thoughts on remodeling your thoughts (which are both sad and beautiful, by the way).
    | Posted on 2014-10-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      A tale of betrayal and poignancy.
    | Posted on 2014-09-29 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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