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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Fortify my thoughts and bury them away.
    Regression of a memory to which i do convey.
    Into a pit of nothingness, sinking from the weight.
    Until a relapse of synapses send it spiraling back up my way.

    Theres no choice but to reopen my eyes.
    Calming inward breaths and outward gentle sighs.
    A catastrophe of my self denial.
    Accompanied by a delusional smile.




    Submitted on 2014-09-23 23:16:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Personally I think this has got taste. Perhaps it's not the panacea for social contiguities deficiencies but I don't find the smile delusional.
    | Posted on 2014-09-24 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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