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    dots Submission Name: Lines dots

    Author: ponykeeper
    ASL Info:    55/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.65 - 246/235/99
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLines dots

    I started watching
    for the lines
    and they're always
    there, really

    hard to figure out
    what’s real
    and what’s been imposed
    on the blue background

    edges melting
    to a dangerous darkness
    beyond the haze

    so I am drawn into myself
    searching for anything
    that isn’t already coloured-- tainted

    by the knowing
    or even the supposing

    we are being

    Submitted on 2014-09-25 13:37:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of the pencil in the Bugs Bunny cartoons
    Someone else it seems is scripting the lines and if they dont like
    the way it turns out they just flip the pencil over and erase
    | Posted on 2014-10-05 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      ...if knowing erases purity
    and what's unseen remains unchanged
    then if my love is left untouched
    she's unaware of bliss and pain...
    | Posted on 2014-09-30 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm guessing this has to do with the world in its surrounding and how it influences you? You, as in oneself. I find this piece giving more imagery than you had intended in the first place- which, of course, is good. I found myself in a blue place with black splatters and white shadows, if not a canvas hung up on a gallery's wall.
    Symbolically speaking, I could feel a sense of self-discovery and identification- as though there's something we've remained oblivious to this entire time and only now have come to realize due to exposure.
    I don't know, just my outlook on it. Intriguing write, thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2014-09-27 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't mean to really mess with you aimed the white on whites but once something exists it has continuation regardless of its existence. It can not be erased. I have considered the perplexities of this aimed since the beginning and I say "before there was anything that mattered (that was made of matter) everything that would ever be existed. It was the essence of totality, it was without dimensional constriction or necessitated form. Theoretically that is of course.

    | Posted on 2014-09-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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