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    dots Submission Name: Years Never Diedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsYears Never Diedots
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    I've lived to see a different world
    To the one I used to know
    Throw a rock in a pond and it swirls
    A ripple effect will show
    and unfold like a virgin pearl
    when it's our time to go
    I feel so distant from the planet
    I'm a stranger in a stranger's home
    A tiny pebble in the land of stones
    I feel stranded
    In a happy home
    All alone
    With a million clones
    And all these events forever survive
    In a passage of time that never dies
    Yet it's a perilous roam.




    Submitted on 2014-09-27 08:32:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The write is so distinct and it is narrative of a different and eternal world .
    | Posted on 2014-11-03 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      I've gotta disagree with the kase dude, but that's probably just because I've got the tendency to adorn writings that feel...unheard of. This feel is a rarity I like to keep personal. I mean, come on, how often may one find poetry with this kind of a killer rhyme? Not to mention, the way you over-lapped each and every image was something I couldn't even imagine accomplishing.
    I enjoyed it, I hope you're proud of writing it, and props to you for achieving something so gnarly -
    although a bit too sad for some audiences -
    but hey, that's life in a nutshell, so...
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2014-10-08 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      This was grest. Great start kinda lost the touch in the middle but you finished strong with those last lines. But weve all been there dude, just keep youre head up cause its never easy but its definately doable!
    | Posted on 2014-10-04 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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