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    dots Submission Name: Soul shattereddots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/227
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSoul shattereddots
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    This is artistry from the heart of the better part of me
    Not hard to see its a start
    wordplay and prophecy
    Mockingjay philosophy
    down around toward tail ends eternal
    Ouroboros way we swallow the world
    Alive and love lost
    Costly words but this is cold cash
    Cross paths with the dragons jaws
    Camera flash and powder ash so
    Hot it's got to be burning down
    Stashed packs of cigarettes
    Black coals and a gold crown
    Heavy heads pound
    The boom sounds and carries off
    The cart paid for with the reality check
    Lost the line and then found it
    Fumble and then recover
    Bound to believe in anything and it tore me asunder
    Find myself over encumbered with this plunder stumbling
    Broke ground while the dragon slumbered
    Awoke just to succumb to the number
    and numb Way we sell out our brothers
    Cover the same over under and smother
    Any ember before it catches
    Caught on that thought and it's recollected
    Elect to redirect my state of mind
    dissecting every peace of powerful persuasion
    Blood in the pen on the line signed
    Timed climb uphill all to find myself
    Missing something important
    I should've found along the way
    Still kissing your ghost as the memories linger
    Long barbs in this soul while I pull out the stinger
    Clotted scars around this ring finger
    Hang in the air like fireworks
    Uncorked wine and afterthought




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      "Still kissing your ghost as the memories linger
    Long barbs in this soul while I pull out the stinger
    Clotted scars around this ring finger
    Hang in the air like fireworks
    Uncorked wine and afterthought"


    the purple tattoo of a lovesick bruise
    among lesser evils, another to choose
    alive like a lump on a lonely shelf
    that can't quite feel love in spite of itself...

    Just some thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2014-10-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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