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    dots Submission Name: Pillars and Pillowsdots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Sometimes it all goes wrong
    It's like the saddest song
    And we can't explain it,
    Let alone do we dare face it,
    Just like you,
    I wish we could all get along.
    Sing the same damn song.
    Everyone hummin' along.

    Be like back in the day,
    Before everything went strange,
    Before all this blind rage,
    Before you being held in a cage.

    Bein' in the backyard,
    Full of sticky fingers,
    Full of Mandee loosing her precious NY hats,
    Full of Oscana Minor Weiner laughs,
    Alas holding hands like some werid witch dance.

    Don't worry so much,
    As you know I'm always here even when i'm not near.
    But now I know I have to face the facts,
    Which is really a hard task.

    Its a hard pill for me to swallow
    watching your heart wallow
    But ill be here dear
    I'll try to provide cheer,
    Eliminate fear,
    Cause I'm turning 17 again,
    Your dragging me along,
    And were writing songs,
    About our ex men, deets and there satin sheets,
    But this isn't disturbia my friend,
    Cause.....,
    I'll be here,
    I'll be your pillow,
    I'll be your pillar,
    I'll be your pillow and pillar.




    Submitted on 2014-10-03 11:47:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the emotion, the way you show not only the character's desire to be of help to their friend, but the obvious struggle that the friend is going through. it really drags you in. well done.
    | Posted on 2014-10-13 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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