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    dots Submission Name: 'But a fraction'dots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       finally finished it! Dedicated to my fiance'


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    dots'But a fraction'dots
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    Love.
    In my mind I'm reciting,
    fighting the urge not to list
    but damn it's so hard to resist
    let me just give you this
    I'm in love with your nose
    cause it's close to your lips
    your voice, fingertips, it's a trip
    sending chills down my spine
    Your eyes they persist
    that you be by my side
    for once it's all adding up right

    So I suppose you've exposed
    who you continue to be
    but my love it will not expire,
    or need to be inspired, or hold on to what is prior
    it's an unbroken desire that I felt when I found you


    My souls waited years for this passion
    the worlds held me up with distraction
    this poem won't explain but a fraction
    of the way that you look
    when your finding your words
    searching for ways to just be the first
    it cant be rehearsed
    the way you insist I put my hand on your wrist
    when you drive
    my love this aint much but a fraction
    of things that I'm feeling inside
    It's tricky to word it all right
    like trying to tame something wild
    But I hope that it just makes you smile




    Submitted on 2014-10-03 13:47:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This very well-written in my opinion. "But a fraction" indeed among other things, couldn't agree more:).
    | Posted on 2014-10-09 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Incredible first verse! Couldnt have wsnted it any other way.
    | Posted on 2014-10-05 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked the last two lines. How often our intellectual state is overwhelmed by our emotions. You've been so eloquent in describing the the thoughts it put you through, the collected tidbits of affection you want to espouse. A mere reflection of the intensity of your emotional state. This may be somewhat candidly vicarious but I can definitely relate to that.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-10-03 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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