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    dots Submission Name: Scarlet Feverdots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 772
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    Bytes: 463



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    dotsScarlet Feverdots
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    Tiptoe like a ninja
    Through land mine fields of harlots
    The easiest of contractions
    A fever entitled scarlet

    Unlike any other symptom
    A practitioner of clarity
    She infects me with a vixenish gaze
    A diseased love's rarity

    Sadly i keep falling
    No cure or resistance
    Nor do i need assistance
    Admiring the contradiction








    Submitted on 2014-10-04 21:00:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The concept here is cute. I love the story behind it. However, if you counted your syllables and added some punctuation, I think it would help it flow better. "Through land mine fields of harlots" love that line. Awesome job!
    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2014-10-18 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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