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    dots Submission Name: Born Lastdots

    Author: Narna
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    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBorn Lastdots

    Toddlers wander the streets.
    Feet that should be sleeping, kept weak.
    Moving to the beat of a war torn reality.
    Beggar mentality;
    palms up, eyes down, smiles wide.
    They take it in their stride.

    How would I react on the
    other side?

    Parents push prepubescent,
    puppy eyed children in to the tourism line.
    Abusing their innocence for sustenance, and
    acceptance for a working life.
    I'm almost obliged to buy.
    Sell my time to feel worthy to carry their

    I wish I could take them with me,
    show them a better time.
    I'm also not sure they'd enjoy it,
    I think they'd giggle if I tried.

    Submitted on 2014-10-05 16:48:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very thought -provoking and timely. I have one teeny nit though--
    "puppy-dog eyed children --I think I would drop the "dog" not only redundant but seems to be off rhythm with the extra syllabe---maybe jez me though Thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2014-10-06 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]

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