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    dots Submission Name: M9[It All]dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    We were standing where I couldn't see
    Really, you didn't want to see me, I think
    The lights were too dim so my words were muttered under the pressure of your poems, novels and fantasies.

    We wore capes under our cloaks
    Guns stuffed in our coats

    So we hide in our heads or the corners of our bed we never spoke about
    because there were things we wanted to say, but never said.

    The reactions you offer towards it all would keep me running from the fall and it just made sense to keep on the move-
    Not only for me and not only for you
    but for the things we couldn't do, I guess...

    Whatever it was
    I hope it was worth the part
    when I become I and you become
    M.




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    ||| Comments |||
      i really like how you put this piece together. the words are arranged quite beautifully
    | Posted on 2014-10-09 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry, to me this reads as more of a rap...may just be me though.
    | Posted on 2014-10-09 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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