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painful changes


Author: gwenn sundala
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written september 27th, 2014


painful changes



a young child at play;
happy, carefree, naive.
unaware of what the world offers,
oblivious to pain.

one accident that changed her;
the quick temper, the slap.
the neighbors that abused her,
the pain, the torment.

the fight to go back;
the will, the kind heart.
the wish for true happiness;
wanting the naive.

the day it all ended;
the day i woke up.
the moment i realized,
life is pain.




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  The loss of innocence. Beautifully depicted tragic and profound.
| Posted on 2014-11-18 00:00:00 | by Iriss | [ Reply to This ]


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