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    dots Submission Name: painful changesdots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Prose/Depressed
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    Description:
       written september 27th, 2014


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    dotspainful changesdots
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    a young child at play;
    happy, carefree, naive.
    unaware of what the world offers,
    oblivious to pain.

    one accident that changed her;
    the quick temper, the slap.
    the neighbors that abused her,
    the pain, the torment.

    the fight to go back;
    the will, the kind heart.
    the wish for true happiness;
    wanting the naive.

    the day it all ended;
    the day i woke up.
    the moment i realized,
    life is pain.




    Submitted on 2014-10-09 13:53:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The loss of innocence. Beautifully depicted tragic and profound.
    | Posted on 2014-11-18 00:00:00 | by Iriss | [ Reply to This ]


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