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    dots Submission Name: The Actions Reactiondots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 335/330/93
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 655
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    Bytes: 1200



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    dotsThe Actions Reactiondots
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    So it was just words,
    then resulted in actions.

    Of a time for changing,
    and a bit of sorrow.

    This is only for its season.
    Whether it be weeks
    or Months...

    Ive been here before.
    I still have the jacket
    and poncho.
    I can wait this storm out,
    I have time...

    You live in indecision.
    And Im afraid
    the longevity of your pause
    has faulted any check mate move.

    I am quite resilient.
    This may come as a surprise,
    due to the discovery
    that you don't know who I am.

    This is a story of a life,
    that is well lived
    and colored by my hands
    and definitely signed be me.

    I take all responsibility
    of the bad,
    and the good..
    its what makes people
    who they are,
    or who they are destine to become
    due to experiences.

    There are no "bad" or "good"
    its just life,
    and situations.
    You have the ability
    to change your own sky.

    Im back to reality
    thank you for that.




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      This was good. I liked it. I'm not really good at critiquing someone else's work though but I really did like it.
    | Posted on 2014-11-18 00:00:00 | by Iriss | [ Reply to This ]
      In my eyes you are writing your story and proving a point that not matter what you go through you will make it end the end. Always remain true to yourself and set your aim for the brightest of the stars and you will never go wrong. Good write and I look forward to more of your work
    | Posted on 2014-10-29 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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