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    dots Submission Name: Morning Musings of a Woman With Abandonment Issuesdots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Description:
       The full title doesn't fit. "Morning Musings of a Woman With Abandonment Issues: the Day After a Fight"

    -I'm not looking to publish it or win awards, I'm just venting more or less.

    -True story, my warped mind expected that my husband of 6 years left over a fight regarding the whereabouts of my spiral notebook.


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    dotsMorning Musings of a Woman With Abandonment Issuesdots
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    You blink sleepily at me
    (or is it self-satisfied?)

    Is this feeling justified?
    My ire, magnified,
    indignation, qualified,

    as I think of how truly
    petrified
    I am.

    You'll never understand the panic
    seizing me,
    squeezing me,
    as I searched frantically
    around our room's anatomy.
    I expected to find nothing--
    nothing in your drawers,
    nothing where you keep
    your shoes, your wallet, your keys.

    Expecting nothing is hardwired in me.

    The relief washed over me
    with your sleepy blink
    and the anger welled up,
    like the shower water did
    in our clogged tub.

    The anger sloshed over,
    smearing my mascara.
    The relief eviscerated
    with each tear liberated.
    I stood in the doorway, naked,
    every decision weighted.
    I choose the most jaded

    and you blink the hangover
    from your eyes, sedated.

    Baiting me, love.




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      firstly, i love the title....

    funny when people can do the unexpected. and even more so, our own reaction to that.

    i will never forget one of the first real fights i had with my husband... he made me soooooo mad (over some stupid jealous idea i had) (sort of justifed though... he was talking to his ex-fiance on a regular basis) (and i do have a jealous streak) (i try really hard not to though).. anyway, i went to take off in my car and it wouldn't start. he came down the drive and jump started me and said: see ya later

    you can imagine how pissed that could make someone (namely me). so pissed, i ran away from home for the night. i got over it though. probably seemed like a nut case at the time too (looking back on it now).

    this is where this write takes me at least....
    | Posted on 2014-11-21 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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