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    dots Submission Name: L-etyourS-elfgoD-owndots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    dotsL-etyourS-elfgoD-owndots
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    No one wants to see your mind, darling
    And the thought of fruitless knowledge
    scares you

    It’s the one of few things that truly make you sick
    to your empty, starving
    stomach.

    So, I will tell you again;
    No one wants to see your mind, you see
    All they want to see is
    your body
    Between sheets as
    it convulses, indulging in
    Mindless promiscuity and
    a damn near OD.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah, interesting! I feel like the narration is actually the hateful monologue of the protagonist. Poor woman to think so brutally of herself. But at the same time how realistic and relatable it is. Who is to deny we have not felt this way ever or done things to escape reality. Like she with LSD (awesome title by the way...makes me think of e. e. cummings...something that he'd pull off).
    | Posted on 2015-02-20 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      sad. truely sad. both in attitude and in story. i hope you're not one of the anybodies.
    | Posted on 2014-12-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      the audience has become
    un-obsessed, un-caressed
    unimpressed by her nakedness

    like a vague sales pitch
    without purpose or pleasure
    the corpse of a courtesan
    in search of treasure...

    Just a few thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2014-11-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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