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    dots Submission Name: Golddots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1219
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 739



    Description:
       Was staring at my screen for a few minutes, a little eh. I needed to write. I needed to. I had to push, but I did. Whatever this is, it's there. And at least it's something.


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    dotsGolddots
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    The finer lines are edges
    Contradictions at their finest
    sculpted from the sharpest scalpels
    created to peel periphery of stone;
    The peculiar remnants of ancient empires
    Yours, where walls met ivory
    and the ground mimicked a darker shade
    I remain vetoed to discern
    as I once was your refugee
    A convict contained within the darker chambers

    Handle twists with every flick of the wrist
    Up to par with the filed end of a blade
    yes, the one flaying at my skin
    Under the control of God's supposed third hand

    Flesh and bone
    It is presumed of me to surmise with antithetical greed and covet;
    power supreme, anomic.




    Submitted on 2014-10-25 22:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Also the title is very powerful.
    | Posted on 2015-04-07 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this so much! I kinda got a puppet feel, the carving of skin, the feeling of being controlled. Dark, but then again that's up my alley. Nicely written.
    | Posted on 2015-04-07 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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