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    dots Submission Name: Singed and Shakendots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 870
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    dotsSinged and Shakendots
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    This apathy is honest
    Head down, eyes low
    No accolades to promise
    Flow on this track is calmest
    Before a cloud bursts
    I'm a rider on the storm
    This is the dawning of an era
    All smart phones and ebonics
    Ebola scare and hooked on phonics
    Burn bright as a comet
    Caught in your atmosphere
    Skin pale except the jaundice
    Proud to be an artist
    Breaking like pond ice
    Fishing for compliments
    Getting carried away
    With the current
    While my past assurances
    Ring hollow and echo
    Off the walls of my brain
    Paining me daily
    Guilty conscience draining
    Dry this verbal reservoir
    Of knowledge gained
    Staining my consciousness
    Blaming the hypocrites
    Who, like me, remain
    Fixed on the money
    Sticking to fingers like honey
    Rolled up in blunted smoke
    It's funny how I'm burning through
    These minimum wages
    Run in circles like dogs
    Trapped in cages
    Chasing tail and raging
    Against the machine
    Aging without grace
    Every day we face the same
    Struggle to survive
    This race to the end and back
    Each cut from the same cloth
    We run this race together
    We keep this pace forever
    Never let time catch us
    It's hard to tell whether
    Or not
    we ever were




    Submitted on 2014-10-26 04:11:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      All smart phones and ebonics
    Ebola scare and hooked on phonics

    lol liked this a lot.

    WOW. This piece packs a punch of diverse emotions. Provoked much? Just get that word out my friend.

    Could it be put to music?

    I really liked it. Missed your voice.

    | Posted on 2014-11-22 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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