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Under The Radiant Lights

Author: kase
ASL Info:    34, M, Winnipeg
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Words: 75
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Under The Radiant Lights

Under the radiant lights
Of the moon's reflective shine
I sit relaxed without a care
With thoughts of you tonight

The stars outshine the candles
Which remain forever lit
Metaphorically symbolizing
Exactly what we'd been

But the shadow's grace emerges
The darkness reflects pain
Contributing an emotion
Between my anger and the shame

Yet somehow I still sit
And stare into heaven's eyes
Wishing you were here
Siitting with me tonight

Submitted on 2014-10-27 09:53:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ha reminds me of a recent happening that I told you about. really great write though, I loved it.
| Posted on 2014-10-29 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]

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