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    dots Submission Name: Fateful Lifedots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFateful Lifedots
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    Away we go to the stars
    we've succumb to fates demise
    Charred chains behind these bars
    Broken promises soon to realize

    Let our hearts lead the way
    down a road of utter sadness
    Fill with hate by day
    as night falls misery's madness

    The moon's light soon fades
    upon the throne I take my place
    We jump freely a pool of blades
    certain death upon this disgrace





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