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    dots Submission Name: C He Really Is Specialdots
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    Author: Narna
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 14/102/68
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsC He Really Is Specialdots
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    I've given myself
    ten minutes,
    to write you
    out of my mind.
    [A minute down, and
    I haven't mentioned you once.]
    A penny for every thought;
    and I'd be a wealthy girl.
    A cramping hand; meaning
    one less stamped-thing;
    Returned to sender. But,
    all the unwritten letters
    of the alphabet;
    Eight reasons I must
    chase after the mailman;
    I didn't know (I love)d (you).
    I do now.




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      There seems to be a scintallating mixture of poingancy, dispear interspread with a tinge of subtle joy.

    Somehow I can relate to the feelings coveyed through this write. The words:

    "I've given myself
    ten minutes,
    to write you
    out of my mind"

    sound like something I could have said myself at this time. I have been let down and I have given myself a week to get rid of what's troubling me. Luckily, I don't love the the person I'm making vague reference to, though something stills nags me .....







    I like your write or maybe I enjoyed the beginning more than the ending .... I enjoyed the intensity of the first lines and I could understand some of the displayed emotions …

    Hope you have agood day,
    kinds regards,


    Ethan Brody
    | Posted on 2014-11-04 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]


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