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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: Narna
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 14/102/68
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    In spite of the tyranny of misgivings,
    I open myself to the idea.
    A dim light, flickering overhead.
    Nothing is said. We're
    In the distance a kettle whistle sings.

    I brew, steep
    thoughts knock the wind
    out of me.
    You liquify my insides, sip
    subtle gestures, swallowing
    my silent chides.
    You spit then, and
    little fragments of myself
    come flying back.

    I could have never imagined
    the magnitude.
    Violent eruptions, I had no time to outrun.
    Engulfed, I'd succumb.
    Everything now hinged
    on the whole
    being greater than the sum.

    We sit in silence.

    Submitted on 2014-10-28 16:48:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with Lloyd :-) . But I would say of the final line, if the whole is to be greater than the sum it will no doubt hinge on how alacritous and clear we are in expressing the concepts this ensues.

    | Posted on 2014-10-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt right there and enjoyed the on-goings. Pretty steep stuff :)xx
    | Posted on 2014-10-29 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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