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    dots Submission Name: Friar Tuckdots
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    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1547/457/118
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       Tis the season.


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    dotsFriar Tuckdots
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    Help me! I've fallen in a Jack-o'-lantern wind
    it comes again, twirling and glowing
    it clames to be a frined
    pretend

    grin
    with bits a'flowing
    and mash a'missin'
    to the friar's art

    the missing part
    in covered kettle coiling
    and boiling
    Oh Jack!

    The brew is on you
    my friend
    so stay and light my way
    at least...
    til kegging tyme




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      Lloyd – Great bit of fun here. Reminds me of’ Pumkinhead’ Ale that comes out at that time of year. “tis the season,” and we in Salem sure know about that. It’s like a mini Mardi Gras here around Halloween. I mentioned pumpkin flavored ale, but I myself, like my beer au naturel, beer for beer’s sake. Back to the poem; I liked “Jacl-o’-Lantern wind,” “Friar’s art,” “coiling and boiling,” and “kegging tyme.” Question; Are you mixing Old English spellings in this poem, “tyme, frined, clames?” Or is it the sloppy speak of one who’s had too much of the brew? Anyway I enjoyed the poem and hope to be reading more of your stuff.

    Phil
    | Posted on 2015-01-30 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely ode to the noble and seasonally iconic gourd!

    Ive tried pumpkin all sorts of ways, cooked and baked. But, Ive never had a pumpkin brew. I imagine it would be tasty, especially with the right spice.

    Im thinking that in your first stanza "frenid" is "friend"; or is it an archaic spelling Im ignorant of?
    | Posted on 2015-01-02 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      to be silly?
    twas a read that brought a smile to my face.
    | Posted on 2014-12-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually considered buying one of those brew your own beer kits. The Friars are notorious for brewing the best beer to locally be found. This is a fun and quirky kinky little rendition to remind me of these facts. Good to read something new from you Lloyd.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-10-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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