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    dots Submission Name: Crushesdots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    they make me tremble
    from solar plexus till the tips
    of fingers, and your lips
    on that street corner, panting,
    whisper into my memory
    never my name -
    soft foreign drawl,
    round and wetted by that
    warm glass of wine.
    I should probably stop saying
    I miss, and if only,
    and the popping of air bubbles
    in a freshly brewed
    holding fast against the ear
    and hear the gentle rumble
    of the distant
    but then again, the hand
    on my neck, growing steady,
    I would very much like
    to jump from this trampoline
    nerve endings –
    to the cold
    winter sun.

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      The very tail ending grabbed me here. jumping from the trampoline . . . to the cold winter sun. the image of the ups and downs, then the hope of flight. Even the cold winter sun would be better than all the ups and downs. Good on ya!
    | Posted on 2014-11-06 00:00:00 | by thepowerglider | [ Reply to This ]
      The thought of such frigid fuck to my crawling hand jokes. I could like to assassinate that dexterity too, touching me against my will. At least as an american I can attempt to bring deadly force to bear, a frosty breeze I that.

    | Posted on 2014-11-04 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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