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    dots Submission Name: bobby - july 23rddots
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    Author: isabella
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    dots bobby - july 23rddots
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    and he said: you are the mother to all.


    hmmmmm.


    we have such interesting convos, he and i. we both get teary eyed
    at some point. i don't know why, but he draws the sad out of me. perhaps i do that to him as well.

    i was telling him i am a horrible communicator. i mean i can talk deeply about anything, express myself on the lower levels, howl
    like a wolf who has lost her mate, but the moment i have a problem with someone, i can't be honest. it's like that conflict just kills me inside and i don't know how to get it out. and the fact that i am dishonest about a situation upsets me even more, because i say: i never lie.

    i guess mostly, we have always had a connection and i don't want to complicate it. i would hate not to have him in my life. more so, i would hate not to be a mermaid on lazy summer days.





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      perhaps you communicate in verse
    converse, inverse, diverse, obverse, reverse
    in any case sadness is sometimes terse
    to claim it as a friend may yet be worse...

    Just thoughts attached to yours.
    | Posted on 2014-11-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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