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    dots Submission Name: Sick Thoughts dots
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    Author: childoftears
    ASL Info:    20/female/CV Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    1.02 - 3/24/39
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 672
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    Description:
       In no way am i ever gonna do this so please dnt b alarmed it was just thoughts and poetry so please dnt freak out and call suicide line or nothing.this was a while bck ago and felt like adding some new stuff to my page it is dark but at the time goin thru alot


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    dotsSick Thoughts dots
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    That silence I was always
    afraid of
    The tormenting pain and sorrow of losing
    the only one you truelly love
    The hurtful hard to breath pain feeling your
    heart crumble
    Its like your whole world burned and crashed
    With just one fumble.

    No time to feel sad for yourself when you
    chose the empty path
    Such hatred for life a undescribable
    Wrath
    All you want is to turn back time
    Yet your stuck in your own sad hell
    alone like a mime

    Here I stay and here I will lay to deal
    with such hatred and pain go insane
    and most Likely kill myself!






    Submitted on 2014-11-10 15:43:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Ramneet about the acceptance and strength but I tend to notice the darker side of most things. In this case, the darker side is that point where people say you gave up. Truth be told, everything has a breaking point. Nice piece though.
    | Posted on 2014-12-11 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all there should be acceptance for the pain and then the strength to deal with it.
    | Posted on 2014-12-07 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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