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    dots Submission Name: What I Would Dodots

    Author: zadhoevlhu13
    ASL Info:    18/f/phil
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 97/94/25
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 535
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       I'm just feeling so inspired! I'm open to your thoughts on this!

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    dotsWhat I Would Dodots

    Oh! What I would do
    To hear you laugh,
    And make you smile,
    Or just look back at me

    Like If I bump my head
    Or make an awful joke,
    If I fake a mistake
    Would that make you laugh?

    What If I say how I love
    The way you wear your hair,
    If I dance like a fool,
    Would that make you smile?

    Maybe If I sit beside you
    And steal a glance or two,
    If I flash a wink
    Would that make you look?

    Then if I just write you a poem
    Thinking someday you might,
    For a laugh, a smile, or look.
    Oh really, what I would do!

    Submitted on 2014-11-12 18:50:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2014-11-21 00:00:00 | by clg | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a nice read, a straight forward attempt to make someone pay attention. I guess you can indeed make someone smile with it.

    I do feel though, and it is sort of my own way of seeing things, that whenever love is to be explored in a write one needs to be passionate about it. I do believe it has to do with the fact that love is the most powerful feeling one can have. On that account, I see that your write conveys the type of intensity that perhaps one might get when reading a friendship- themed write, so to speak. Just my own take on it.

    Wishing you well,
    Ethan Brody
    | Posted on 2014-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]

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