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    dots Submission Name: My Insides IIdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Found this laying around. I had a My Insides ll & lll, but deleted them a while back. So, this will be the replacement to continuance.


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    dotsMy Insides IIdots
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    I'm caught staring down an elderly woman
    Her sleeves are uneven
    I reach out and tap one finger
    All but my intentions linger
    Because I see all of her withers
    Eyes and lips tether
    Strained to the point I don't know how she sees
    And although she does not speak to me
    She must say the prettiest things
    Because when she looks into my vacant eyes
    Her blue and gray fill the emptiness inside
    Wisdom I never knew
    And knowledge to identify the truth
    Something hidden from me my entire life
    Throwing away every single lie
    And suddenly I feel alive
    But before I thank her
    There's just one more thing to know
    That
    Everyone dies.




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