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    dots Submission Name: Stretchdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1022
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    Bytes: 699



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       Using this site as spare storage more than anything, nowadays. Hello to any who remain.
    This was written earlier this year.
    I was pretty pleased with that pun at the time.


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    Separating a chicken and also
    a half-moon from the nail bed,
    waned briefly gibbous.

    Moon, I think, and then
    broken tooth, the red mouth
    welling through,

    And then,
    napkining the third finger,
    two birds with one stone—

    I trick myself into a laugh—

    All the while, night like a proud toddler
    wades hip-deep into the suburbs,
    showing off its own gleaming tooth

    this easy, lazy pleasure
    fried chicken in the mid-May heat
    salt, cold water

    each throb of the finger a tiny benediction
    I give generously to myself
    again and again.




    Submitted on 2014-11-17 00:09:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with MyPeriodical. Its as if i could picture it in my mind. Spooky!

    D-Ink
    | Posted on 2014-12-14 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      Dudette, this is...enthralling.
    Although I can't see the exact message, or what you're aiming for with this piece, I have this picture-motion in my head of everything that's going on; the vibes of Kill Bill, the picture like Pulp Fiction. I mean, they're not my favorite movies, but the combination is refreshing.
    Radical, loved it.
    | Posted on 2014-11-25 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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