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    dots Submission Name: duffle bagdots
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    Author: aftertheflesh
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 76/113/48
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsduffle bagdots
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    look at the mirror
    the reflections not the same
    as it was the day before
    the beast that you now see
    is what you have become
    your heart turned
    to blackend rust
    and your lies turned to your truth
    your eyes now seem hollow and dark
    you break the mirror but you're still here




    Submitted on 2004-08-05 13:07:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the illusions we see are selves in are not what others see and the mirror represents the truth about the persongood write keep it up catch u on the flipside
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by stickman | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... I liked this up to the "breaking the mirror" part. That just confused me. May want to work on that. Otherwise, this was pretty good.
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. The words were wonderfully put together but I don't think the title fit the poem. I also think it would help flow better to the reader if you put some commas in. Just a thought but this is already great.
    --blt
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]



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