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    dots Submission Name: The Buttefly Againdots
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    Author: JeanArlertArmin
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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    Description:
       This is basically my own story based on my own story. I'm writing a story that's based on this. I'm just using it for my personal reference.


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    dotsThe Buttefly Againdots
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    "What's your favorite animal?"
    "Butterfly!" I replied cheerfully with a smile. I was wrong to say that. I should've said dog or cat. Now they're coming for me.

    "Your favorite animal's a butterfly?"
    "Yeah."
    "That's weird." It was only my first day at school, and everyone already hated me.
    "I was only joking."
    "Really? I find that hard to believe."
    "My actual favorite animal is a fox."
    "That's it! I tried to be nice to you, but I can't. You're too weird! No one here likes you, they'll never like you! Go back home you stupid-" I couldn't handle it anymore. I called for help.
    "Butterfly."
    "What's wrong with you? Are you socially retarded?"
    She's dead.
    I smiled. If only I knew that the butterfly would come for me too in the end.




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