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    dots Submission Name: Dream Whispererdots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsDream Whispererdots
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    Whisper a dream...
    High on love til an overdose
    two warm bodies ever so close
    Entangled in bliss til stars fade
    a sudden eclipse a darker shade

    Whisper a dream...
    Across light years the distance grows
    feelings change as time slows
    Shimmering light forsake this heart
    as misery earns its part

    Whisper a dream...
    Vengeful eyes seek crimson rivers
    as the streams silence the quivers
    Suppressed memories awaken the demons within
    as poison spreads this sin

    Whisper a dream...
    Left tortured and partially alive
    in abyss the demons thrive
    Living among countless undead
    its just beginning long roads ahead

    Whisper a dream...




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