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    dots Submission Name: Let me in.dots

    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       not sure if im finished with this.

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    dotsLet me in.dots

    Ive got war inside my pretty little mind
    Fighting every epiphany that wants to see me clean
    An it’s mean,cause it’s four beers in
    Can’t decide how I feel, I just wanna lean…

    What’s hope?
    That I get a chance at the gate to explain every sin,
    Let me in…
    That sympathy is something real
    Can sorry cover.. sex, greed, and jealousy?
    God forgive me for the way I feel..
    Speaking of…I’m afraid to mention rage
    It leaves me speechless at times, something aint right
    Am I creative or dying inside?

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      I crave for creativity and of course time to write most of all. Sometimes I think am killing it by spending more time in social media:p
    | Posted on 2014-12-11 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your input.thanks for adding onto my poetry its nice to see someone is really trying to understand .
    | Posted on 2014-12-04 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      It leaves me speechless at times
    something aint right
    Am I creative or dying inside?

    or am I an honest
    distraught animal
    wrestling with hope
    both empty and full...

    My thoughts on your thoughts as your future and past wrestle for supremacy in the here and now.
    | Posted on 2014-11-29 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a lot of rage myself, positive states of outraged indignation. Strained as it might put upon seem I feel this is creatively sound spontaneity that's healthy (perhaps) and realistic, not that it can't easily get out of hand or make us bitter but we humans are fighters. In this is one of our races strengths. Then again perhaps your so mad because you don't have enough sex and money or aren't the most beautiful of all. There is a certain duality to most everything.


    PS: Take it from someone who knows beer won't solve these problems, as fun as it can be!
    | Posted on 2014-11-20 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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