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    dots Submission Name: The Warrior of Mandosdots

    Author: dancer-of-words
    ASL Info:    21/trans/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 167/158/74
    Words: 663
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Warrior of Mandosdots

    Some great empires revere you
    some adore you, others sneer you
    like a silken black-cloaked snake
    strewing anger in your wake
    for you leave behind an ache-
    every life dreads to be near you.

    You eat civilizations raw,
    each battlement and crumbling wall.
    Eat memories and lives and limbs
    before you every light grows dim,
    all life is subject to your whims
    for you care not for mortal law.

    You’ve beaten, with a mighty pull
    all great heroic men in full.
    Breaking every golden crown
    while the gods come crashing down
    from their silver-singing, wind-blown
    high Olympian pedestal.

    Deep beneath the crumbling brown
    Waiting at the last countdown
    In your blackened step you’ve trod
    over Grecian demigod
    buried them beneath the sod
    where you leave them all to drown.

    Hercules and Pericles
    Belpharon and Heracles
    The greatest men before you fell
    bereft of youth, a stooped gray shell
    the last light slipped from ancient well
    and fell to the Aegean Sea.

    On a darkened summer night
    whether fate be black or bright
    like a whisper in the snow
    see them wander, see them go
    where you lead them, none may know
    fading into distant light.

    Malevolent red eyes aglow
    while your footfalls sleeping slow
    curl like smoke within a mist
    icy hands clasp round a wrist-
    all despair whom you have kissed
    with your lips of peace and woe.

    Are you evil, are you good-
    do you give what’s said you would?
    Wrenching sorrow and goodbyes
    from unheeded living cries
    all despair who see your eyes
    piercing from your blackened hood.

    Sometimes early, sometimes late
    following the scent of hate
    in blackened trench ‘neath leaden skies
    where leaden army whistling flies
    and the scorching mountain sighs
    there you hide and lie in wait.

    You lurk with sickness and decay
    and usher in a black new day.
    Screaming through the dark with light
    hid in homes, burn ebony white
    when children cough into the night,
    you lead the dewy glinted way.

    You, who lead us into light
    wait by rainy roads at night
    and in hospitals and homes
    in the darkling sea that foams
    and with each fell beast that roams
    out of mind and out of sight.

    You who take the weary, lost
    every sailor ocean-tossed;
    while before you is outpoured
    every king and maid and lord
    none survive your curving sword
    or your swift eternal frost.

    You, like white mist in the dark
    like snow falling, silent, stark
    cold as ice that chills the bones
    wintry as the wind that moans
    older than the very stones
    all the world has felt your mark.

    Who knew that so harsh a hand
    that took so much, unthought, unplanned
    could make the sorrow of man decrease
    could make pain of the weary cease
    and bring some everlasting peace
    who gathered peoples like the sand.

    For, wherever men must be
    you’re found most, to set us free.
    You who lead us to the end
    some may look upon as friend-
    some dare not to comprehend
    and to others: enemy.

    Causing men to go insane
    some to lose and some to gain.
    Irony, it should be fated
    you, who are so very hated
    should at once, be long-awaited
    by so many steeped in pain.

    Some dare not to speak your name
    Certain ones you lead to fame
    all your voiceless words, they heed them
    none dare bite the hand that feeds them
    who can tell where you will lead them
    if you lead them all the same.

    Some to grand palacial beauty,
    some to darkness and to shame.

    Doubtless yet we each shall meet you
    though we cannot hope to beat you
    some think that perhaps there’s more-
    perhaps a place beyond a door,
    a land upon a distant shore…
    And thus, you find with peace we greet you.

    Submitted on 2014-11-21 18:16:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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