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    dots Submission Name: Past the Pastdots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Description:
       Feeling hopeless and unsure of what is the correct thing to do.


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    dotsPast the Pastdots
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    Painful reminders of mistakes long since past
    Memories of happiness gone, kicking my ass
    Can not return to a state of bliss
    Heart filled joy, sealed with a meaningless kiss
    Can not turn back the hands of time
    And regain what once was mine
    To witness the truth every day
    Longing for that perfectly worded day
    Visions dance in my mind, and sing to my soul
    Tears of sadness doth the wind constantly blow
    Gone from my grasp, once held so tight
    A feeling of completeness that felt so right
    Hurt ad cry, my soul screams for relief
    Trapped in a world of sorrow and disbelief
    Can what was lost, return to heart
    Or forever be done in by cupids dart
    Linger and dwell I guess I remain
    Bleeding heart my sheets are stained
    Nothing said can reverse what is now
    Reverse polarities, some way some how
    Sleep in tears, to my pillow I fall
    Because I thought I knew it all
    But a lesson I have since learned
    And all it took was to get burned.

    Death




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      Very intense, and riddled with supported uncertainty.
    "Tears of sadness doth the wind constantly blow"
    That line really stood out to me, the words you used just really painted and described your emotion. Reminds me of The Tempest by Shakespeare.
    Don't fall into the void that is the past! I hope all will be clear in time for you, and wish you the best!
    A good read, however. Always surprises me that when in dire circumstance we're able to generate such good work!

    ~Vincent
    | Posted on 2015-01-02 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]
      lessons come so painful slow
    hard to learn and burn with growth
    petrified and in this stance
    life just has that tip toe dance
    and how are we to get a chance
    when death has hateful outstretched hands?
    maybe kinda hazy but still we could see
    drive down the road when we know how to weave
    take the time to find belief
    that there's something past the grief
    | Posted on 2014-12-05 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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