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    dots Submission Name: Always and Neverdots
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    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAlways and Neverdots
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    Fearless anger, careless swears
    Overly used to make a difference
    Dodges, damages, daggers and dears
    Under the feet of fallen souls
    Life was like chasing a shattered idol
    Repeatedly smeared winner concepts
    Life was a mundane to your godly human
    The loft that birthed always and never
    Died again a human forever
    Had died again in a cynical blink
    A promise broken down to the clay
    A never that ended just in a day
    Mortality defined by death again
    Was more than we could say.




    Submitted on 2014-12-05 12:40:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Please do yourself a huge favor right now: remove the 'like' before 'chasing a shattered idol.' Ahhhh. That's better, isn't it? The rhythm is good, there's deliberation in the words that gives them some weight. Excellent.
    | Posted on 2014-12-09 00:00:00 | by WonderCunt | [ Reply to This ]


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