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    dots Submission Name: Nowheresdots

    Author: Sheakhan
    ASL Info:    25/M/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 175/197/89
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       First in a long while, left it here to be unseen, as fits the subject.

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    In the grand scheme of things what am I?

    Is it comparable to gentle breezes and fallen leaves?

    Mild drizzle, sun through clouds,
    whispering brooks hidden by moss
    and the weary drooping arms of sword-fern, dulled.

    Closed books sealed with dust.

    Letters lost and discarded.

    Inkwells crusted shut, bic lighters rusted, fucked.

    Asphalt graying.

    Lame horse,
    shattered engine block,
    bread-bag tab,
    cobwebbed corner.

    Grain of sand.

    Submitted on 2014-12-08 09:54:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is some good imagery here and there are some clichés. I definitely appreciated the weary arms of the sword fern, found that v. effective. Starts off w/ a pretty common, oft heard question and some pretty basic imagery but evolves nicely. give the beginning as much imagination as you did the end and i think you've got something really wonderful here.
    | Posted on 2014-12-09 00:00:00 | by WonderCunt | [ Reply to This ]
      Not even nobody know-where saying nothing. We could change the world with such diction.


    PS: Seriously, not being sarcastic, nothing enunciates.
    | Posted on 2014-12-08 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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