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Author:	vedanta19
Elite Ratio:	3.28 - 503/510/143
Words:	63

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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green pastures dots

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I think of you, still,
when greys have replaced
young years,

you must have moved on,
to brighter pastures - offering more,
when love is all i had to offer,

but old love dies hard
atleast for me,

for you,
an experience;

strangely -
i miss the good moments;

love,
too prefers green pastures.

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  A very sweet write and feelings about an old love. I liked the line a lot.
love,
too prefers green pastures.
Keep it up. Good work.
| Posted on 2015-01-18 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this piece seemed very nostalgic as jaycee mentioned previously. And to further discuss her comment thinking of old loves, I believe for the most part, or at least for me, it's the same case. Memories with a lover can be so genuine and unique, even if it is an old love. It's a seeming connection of a higher level that is shard mutually...although with men today it seems many have ulterior motives which is disheartening. How I wish more people were romantics with honor and integrity!
The comparisons and links you make in the piece are lovely, and I always find pieces, especially nostalgic ones, to be especially alluring when related to nature. Nature tents to embody memory well, I think. And if the pasture is not green, simply add some fertilizer. Not saying that you should add shxt (for the sake of making a pun), but make that pasture green! Haha.
Relatable piece, and written well!

~Vincent

| Posted on 2015-01-02 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]
  Simple, Clean, and just something that could have come out of my mind and experiences. I often wonder if men think of old loves in the way women do. Those relationships become part of us to pull out and remember, but the good moments are always what we miss and think back on at least at first. Then you remember why you moved on because yes, love does not survive in a vacuum. it too needs nurturing and new sustenance.
I'd might tighten the second strophe by taking out the words "must have" and "when." but overall it's a nice piece of nostalgia.
| Posted on 2014-12-19 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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