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Author:	Ontlogicalamity
ASL Info:	33/M/NY
Elite Ratio:	4.67 - 190/194/45
Words:	64

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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Purpose

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Purpose is not something to seek,
but something to find, to embrace.

How many writers rant aimlessly,
or use far more words than are necessary?

It galls when a piece hooks me with fine language,
and turns out to be without purpose.

Why am I reading it?
Why are you reading this?

I expect you to have a reason.

Submitted on 2014-12-11 16:25:34 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  My purpose?
to have a fine meal with my wife
and compliment her culinary skills

at the end of a long day
of teaching indifferent students
to love writing, or at least respect it

enough to understand its alchemy
and spin a sort of magic from words
that lead to practical applications

because I realize their successes
are my dessert, even if I'm
a forgotten and menial chef

| Posted on 2014-12-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  I like that the first couple of lines tie in so well with the ending, the middle lines are fluff and it looks like its going to be a rant about how many writers do- while you are doing the exact same thing....

I like the irony and miscief of that setup because
the last line is very powerful and allows the poem to go from seeming didactic or school-marmy to

Something more like a self affirmation

or something
that is actually profound to hear.....

like if im thinking about this you dude i dont know anything about him- but just through this ability to process information i get a sense of who the man might be.

I also relate the last line to what i think is very important about writing, and then i think im a dingbat cos well, isnt writing about life and isnt the true value in life about purpose....

So i admire what is present here.
| Posted on 2014-12-13 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  I have been accused of blither shtick and rambling babble before but I agree purpose needs to be divined though I don't think I agree that seeking it is an aberrance.
| Posted on 2014-12-11 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.