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    dots Submission Name: Purposedots

    Author: Ontlogicalamity
    ASL Info:    33/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 190/194/45
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Purpose is not something to seek,
    but something to find, to embrace.

    How many writers rant aimlessly,
    or use far more words than are necessary?

    It galls when a piece hooks me with fine language,
    and turns out to be without purpose.

    Why am I reading it?
    Why are you reading this?

    I expect you to have a reason.

    Submitted on 2014-12-11 16:25:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My purpose?
    to have a fine meal with my wife
    and compliment her culinary skills

    at the end of a long day
    of teaching indifferent students
    to love writing, or at least respect it

    enough to understand its alchemy
    and spin a sort of magic from words
    that lead to practical applications

    because I realize their successes
    are my dessert, even if I'm
    a forgotten and menial chef

    | Posted on 2014-12-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that the first couple of lines tie in so well with the ending, the middle lines are fluff and it looks like its going to be a rant about how many writers do- while you are doing the exact same thing....

    I like the irony and miscief of that setup because
    the last line is very powerful and allows the poem to go from seeming didactic or school-marmy to

    Something more like a self affirmation

    or something
    that is actually profound to hear.....

    like if im thinking about this you dude i dont know anything about him- but just through this ability to process information i get a sense of who the man might be.

    I also relate the last line to what i think is very important about writing, and then i think im a dingbat cos well, isnt writing about life and isnt the true value in life about purpose....

    So i admire what is present here.
    | Posted on 2014-12-13 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      I have been accused of blither shtick and rambling babble before but I agree purpose needs to be divined though I don't think I agree that seeking it is an aberrance.
    | Posted on 2014-12-11 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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