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    dots Submission Name: Hello theredots
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    Author: D-Ink
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 81/59/58
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHello theredots
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    Hello you there.
    How are you?

    Please wait a minute,
    Just spare me some moments.

    Your face, its so familiar...
    Have we met somewhere?

    Never? Are you sure?
    But, I think I've seen you.

    In my dreams,
    Where sleep is a blessing.

    With your presence,
    I surrender.

    Wait, don't go.
    No! Come back!

    I'm not flirting!
    I'm not lying!

    Wait...
    One chance is all I ask.

    Please turn around,
    Give me a glance.

    I'll sure make that
    frown turn upside down.

    In due time,
    You'll realise,
    I'm a dime.

    So please, dear please.
    Give me a chance,
    Pretty please.




    Submitted on 2014-12-12 09:04:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice pickup line. I'd go out with that guy. :D
    | Posted on 2014-12-27 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]
      Jap hicue, whatever.
    | Posted on 2014-12-18 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This makes me think of a guy tryin to talk to a girl whos way outta his league... For instance the nerd and the cheerleader
    | Posted on 2014-12-13 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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