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    dots Submission Name: A Day In Lifedots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 335/330/93
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Day In Lifedots
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    I found myself looking for you,
    a car on the highway,
    a person in the store...

    The mind can be a tricky beast,
    or is it just my own?

    I wake up and forget the scenery has changed,
    life has diverted from its route,
    and now I'm clearing trees to make a path
    to somewhere I didn't want to go in the first place.

    I'm lost in this forest
    And I'm pretty sure I've passed that tree previously
    yet is familiarity gives me hope
    at least I'm aware of this way
    even though its taking me no where.

    I want to be angry about this situation
    I want to go crazy
    yet as my storm rages on the inside
    my exterior is calm and returning to "normal" activities..

    I presume that is the way it goes
    no time for receptivity
    just accept and move on....

    I have my "happy things"
    and the show must go on.

    The curtain is being raised,
    time for the "Show"

    ~*End Scene*~




    Submitted on 2014-12-14 06:32:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Frustration and acceptance. Thats pretty much what I received from this piece or perhaps it is just my reaction to your circumstances.

    Thanks for sharing. Good luck for your future. May you make your way to a reality that does satisfy you.
    | Posted on 2014-12-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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