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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 337/331/94
    Words: 412
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Its a life
    a subscription to a magazine you didn't want in the 1st place.

    So many "ads"
    On their glossy pages...
    filled with words of sanctity,
    giving to deceptiveness.

    I was there,
    engulfed in its pages
    entertained by its professions..


    And there laid its inaccuracies
    and my readiness to accept its "facts"

    Its hard to recall yourself after remorse lingers
    life is changing its turn,
    I need more time for the adjustment.




    Submitted on 2014-12-16 21:06:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh I love the metaphor,

    a subscription to a magazine you didn't want in the 1st place.

    So many "ads"
    On their glossy pages...

    Very original. These lines in themselves say so much.

    It is hard to find yourself here, reviewing something so grandiose in itself but still so shallow. Being caught in this web, thinking all the while, what am I doing here?

    I really liked this piece, probably one of my favorites of yours.

    | Posted on 2014-12-20 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes I think we want and need more time, but being immersed in the now, the change, while painful, jolts us to search ourselves and become stronger.

    my fave line: "Its hard to recall yourself after remorse lingers"
    Lots of room for thought and interpretation and I liked that it made me think. Are we recalling our old selves and recognizing it through the changes and would we really want to go back to our younger self. I often think about that because at 44, I'm definitely not who I was at 24 and 24 definitely had some qualities I miss, but I like who I am now as well.

    Nice.
    | Posted on 2014-12-19 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems that what is always best, is what's on the un-turned page.

    Just a thought.

    Phil
    | Posted on 2014-12-16 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]


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