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    dots Submission Name: Endearmentdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsEndearmentdots
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    Within time vessels collide two differences of lives,
    Highlighting inequalities and imperfections deep within the spirit.
    Streaking across my dark skies your smile ignites my night,
    Nesting me in vulnerability to newly profound merits.

    Moments and memorial gained as I wander in silence,
    Unspoken affections hide deep beneath the surface.
    And if I could find the courage to break this shyness,
    Would sharing these feelings ever serve their true purpose?

    Before the curtains of reality closes this stage,
    I would like to share this one sentiment I hold true,
    The support that helped me write my life its new page,
    And the many feelings I’ve gained just being around you.

    The presence alone keeps the deepest of sorrows away,
    Finding many ways to make me laugh in my days of hell.
    So before I close I’ll find one more thing to say,
    Thank you for lifting my soul before it completely fell.




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      Alex,
    This is one of my favorite writes from you. It's full of so many emotions and I like that you did not really worry about a specific form to slap it all down and interrupt the imagery. I know it's not a new piece, but it reminded me of being in a really dark place and then finding that one person who can lift you out of that hell. (In my case it was my husband.) That person can also let you free-fall, but it's amazing to me how we tend to reach out and find what and who we need right before we hit the ground without a parachute.
    ~jan
    | Posted on 2015-02-05 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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