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Aurora borealis

Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 112
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Aurora borealis

A minute, then, if that is all it takes
before me
to run along the violin
strung up against
the heaving ceiling

and what if it were - all it took
a note or two from the past
to call up a gigantic shockwave
see it all momentarily -
that one elated
frozen --
the edge of elasticity of muscles,
the universe is stretching
like a sated cat,
to only-just collapse --

and who is to say
that it didn't?

aurora borealis, then,

why not throw up your hands
in ancient ardour and
beg salvation?

Submitted on 2014-12-21 14:24:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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