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    dots Submission Name: Aurora borealisdots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAurora borealisdots

    A minute, then, if that is all it takes
    before me
    to run along the violin
    strung up against
    the heaving ceiling

    and what if it were - all it took
    a note or two from the past
    to call up a gigantic shockwave
    see it all momentarily -
    that one elated
    frozen --
    the edge of elasticity of muscles,
    the universe is stretching
    like a sated cat,
    to only-just collapse --

    and who is to say
    that it didn't?

    aurora borealis, then,

    why not throw up your hands
    in ancient ardour and
    beg salvation?

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